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Excerpt Monday-A Bite To Remember

Alright, this is my first excerpt monday so I hope you guys like it. This is a short story that I named A Bite To Remember. (PG-13) For more stories from Excerpt Monday, please go to this site: http://excerptmonday.wordpress.com/

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         The icy breeze snapped at my face, burning the skin in its wake. Night was crawling in, the sky darkening with the passing minutes, and I still had a ways to go until I reached my destination. Most of the stores crowding this end of Chicago were empty of people, their lights glimmering with a false sense of liveliness. The old cobblestones that made up the street beneath my feet were cracked and ragged– not at all the ideal terrain for heels– and despite the early hour the moon was already hanging low in the sky, illuminating the shabby alley that I was cutting through.

         I shivered and pulled my dress coat closer, reveling in the minuscule source of warmth. My heels clicked on the ground, loud compared to the noiseless, desolate streets. With a few more lengthened steps, I rounded the final corner and took the stairs leading to Rowan’s apartment two at a time. Trembling from the cold, I approached the last apartment on the strip and pulled my hand out of my pocket to knock. Though before I had the chance, the door creaked open, revealing the interior of Rowan’s apartment to me for the first time.

         Candles were positioned around the room, their flames flickering in the eerie darkness. The walls were painted a dark red color and the floor appeared to be gold. The living room was small but it fit Rowan’s personality perfectly. I smiled at the décor and moved further into the room, feeling hesitant without Rowan there to guide me.

         “Rowan?” I called– my voice breathless from the lengthy walk. I stood still for a moment, shifting on my heels as I waited.

         A cool breath of air blew on my neck and I jumped at the sudden feeling. A smile lit my face as two familiar arms snaked around my waist and I twisted around to gaze up at Rowan. In the dim light I could just make out his features– pale, almost white skin, brown hair the shade of chocolate, and eyes that were too amazing to be described.

         “Fancy meeting you here,” Rowan murmured, gazing down at me with a smile in his eyes.

         “I know, right,” I leaned into his sturdy chest and sighed. “So what’s the occasion?” I wondered aloud, his shirt muffling the words.

         “There isn’t one. I just assumed that you’d like to see my place.”

         I gave a mental head shake and rolled my eyes. I wasn’t buying it. Though instead of pursuing the answer, I gave up and pulled away. As I moved to the side, I tilted my head and shot my ‘date’ a questioning smile.

         “Dinner,” he announced at the sound of the timer, and with that he grabbed my hand and lead me to the small dining room a few feet away.

         A table in the center of the room was set for two with plain kitchenware and generic lighting. The plates were already filled with various meats and greens. I licked my lips and slipped into the chair opposite of Rowan. We ate in silence for not much needed to be said. We understood each other, we loved each other, and in that moment, that was all that mattered.

         At last the food had been cleaned from my plate and I found myself being pulled back towards the den. Rowan came to a stop in the heart of the room and moved over to the CD player to raise the volume. With a lazy grin on his face, Rowan sauntered back over to where I stood.

         “Dance with me?” he whispered in my ear, sending chills down my back.

         I nodded and wrapped my arms around his neck, leaning my head on his chest as I had done earlier. Rowan copied my movements and soon we were moving in sync with the slow music. We continued to dance for sometime, I can’t be sure how long, but it felt like only seconds had passed when Rowan leaned down and brushed his lips across my forehead.

         “I love you, Blaze,” he whispered against my skin, a smile forming on his lips. As he pulled me closer, Rowan began to kiss down the side of my face and continued down the contours of my throat. “Forever,” His lips traced over my pulse point and I moaned at the soft sensation. Rowan kissed the spot once more, as if claiming it as his own, and then I felt a sharp pain where his lips had been just a mere second before.

         A sharp hiss escaped my lips and the slight pain increased until I felt myself beginning to fall. My heart racing, I gasped and stumbled as the area on my neck began to lose feeling. The numbness spread from the point where Rowan had bitten me and continued to flow through my veins until almost no sense of feeling remained. As my last ounce of strength drained away, I collapsed into Rowan’s arms and a mumbled whisper escaped my lips. As my vision began to fade, Rowan let out a strangled cry and pulled me closer to his body, whispering over and over, “I love you,” and that was the last thing I heard as the world around faded me to black.

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         My eyes fluttered open, heavy from the slumber that had bound me to the unconscious world. Feeling almost weightless, I slid off the bed and glided over to the gaze in the mirror.

         Outside, the birds were singing, the street was alive with people moving forward with their lives, but I am no longer a part of that world. Nor will I ever be again.

         In the mirror, my violet eyes, the color of flames dancing on water, glistened back at me– exposing me for what I truly was.

         A vampire.

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Alright, so there was my excerpt! I hope you enjoyed! Here are some others that I recomend, happy reading!

Stephanie Draven, Paranormal Romance (PG 13)
Heather S.Ingemar, Dark Fantasy/Poetry (PG13)
Babette James, Fantasy Romance (PG 13)
Cynthia Justlin, Romantic Suspense (PG 13)
Julia Knight, Fantasy Romance (PG13)
Ansha Kotyk, Middle Grade Adventure (PG13)
Adelle Laudan, Contemporary Romance (PG 13)
RF Long, YA Paranormal (PG13)
Caitlynn Lowe, Epic Fantasy (PG13)
Shawntelle Madison, Paranormal Romance (PG 13)
Bria Quinlan, Rom Com (PG)


12 Responses to “Excerpt Monday-A Bite To Remember”


  1. August 10, 2009 at 3:59 pm

    Yay, Meg! Great excerpt!! Congrats on your first time here!

  2. 2 briaq
    August 10, 2009 at 4:10 pm

    Wow – you rock with details! Go you.

    Can I tell you how proud I am that you’re our first teen writer? See what a little arm twisting can do?

    :)
    bria

    • 3 megasaurus111
      August 10, 2009 at 9:12 pm

      Thank you! I’m glad you liked it. I’ll definitely do this again next month! I’m glad you twisted my arm!

  3. 4 anshakotyk
    August 11, 2009 at 7:51 am

    Great story! Wonderful detail. I love the focus you have on her eyes at the end. Awesome!

  4. 5 melsmag
    August 12, 2009 at 8:54 am

    Oh this was good! I loved the hook at the end. I’d so read more of this.

  5. August 12, 2009 at 10:45 pm

    Very nice, Meg. I loved how you set the scene and delivered all the way through! Glad to see you’ll be back!


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